This is an attempt at a modern, flow of consciousness, style poem that I was experimenting with. I would appreciate constructive criticism and comments. I haven't worked much with this style, so I am not completely comfortable with it and would appreciate anything that would help me to improve.
"Runner's High"
Running, plodding,
Feet pounding,
So slow,
Not far left to go,
Teammates cheering,
Coach yelling,
Almost done,
Start going,
Faster, faster, faster,
Sprinting, gliding,
Soaring, flying,
Over wet grass,
Heart pounding
In ears,
Breath rasping
In throat,
Can't hear
Anything else,
Feet stop hurting,
Running so fast,
Exhilarating!
S. Ombre
"Runner's High"
Running, plodding,
Feet pounding,
So slow,
Not far left to go,
Teammates cheering,
Coach yelling,
Almost done,
Start going,
Faster, faster, faster,
Sprinting, gliding,
Soaring, flying,
Over wet grass,
Heart pounding
In ears,
Breath rasping
In throat,
Can't hear
Anything else,
Feet stop hurting,
Running so fast,
Exhilarating!
S. Ombre
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